I tried hard to combine the words to this poem
To make the meter work out like in a song
Now tis one am and now I fear I've failed
So much for my dreams of writing the bestest
I'll just have to stick to microbio. Yay.
Hard, isn't it? This is not a bad attempt-- only a few places where the stresses are in the wrong place. You have stuck closely to the 11 syllable rule.
the second to last syllable has to be long, or in English, stressed, so line 2 is slightly off, as we wouldn't typically stress the 'a' in "in a song"
in line 3, "and" gets the stress accent, which isn't normal in English. This works better:
Now 'tis one in the morning. Have I failed, then?
In line 4, the meter would require no stress on "my dreams", which sounds unnatural if you read the line out loud, and in line 5, the meter demands you put the stress on the last syllable of microbio, which also sounds weird.
Hi Valerie,
ReplyDeleteHard, isn't it? This is not a bad attempt-- only a few places where the stresses are in the wrong place. You have stuck closely to the 11 syllable rule.
the second to last syllable has to be long, or in English, stressed, so line 2 is slightly off, as we wouldn't typically stress the 'a' in "in a song"
in line 3, "and" gets the stress accent, which isn't normal in English. This works better:
Now 'tis one in the morning. Have I failed, then?
In line 4, the meter would require no stress on "my dreams", which sounds unnatural if you read the line out loud, and in line 5, the meter demands you put the stress on the last syllable of microbio, which also sounds weird.